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Writing Samples
Band 3

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that educational facilities like
universities
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 should admit
alike
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an equal
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numbers
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number
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 of students in each subject .Personally, I agree with
this
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 opinion that pupils have to follow their
interest
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interests
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 and nobody has to ignore whether they are women or men.
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 with, it is believed that there are many courses which offered in
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universities
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universities,
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 particularly related to technical and physical subjects and
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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 many people have
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this
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the
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aspect
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perception
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 that these majors are just for men
due to
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powerful
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the powerful
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 and strong body shape .
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, it is true that moving heavy
stuffs
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stuff
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such
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 as boxes or driving trucks will be intensive for women.
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Nevertheless
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 many females are interested in
carring
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carrying
 out these
sort
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sorts
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 of things
and
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, and
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also they
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they also
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 have
the
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a
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 high capability
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, otherwise
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otherwise
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regardless
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 of other people's
opinion
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opinions
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.
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,
universities
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 must uphold justice among students no
mather
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matter
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they
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whether they
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 are females or males. If one person would like to educate
one
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in one
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 major
he
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apply
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or
she
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they
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taking
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take
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 into account
through
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apply
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that subject thoroughly
and
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, and
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then
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 they make
decision
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a decision
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 to apply for that module.
Universities
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 are responsible for providing an environment to ensure
them
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apply
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that
university
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the university
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 is a place
which
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where
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 they can
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their dreams and their rights will not be violated. In conclusion,
universities
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 can play a crucial role in every society and they can have a notable
effects
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effect
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 on the future of one individual
in addition
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 to
enforce
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enforcing
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the
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apply
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justice between all genders.

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structure
Make your main idea clear in the first line of each paragraph.
structure
Use a topic sentence to show what you will talk about.
content
Give one clear reason for each idea and add a simple example.
language
Check grammar and use correct verb form, plural, and punctuation.
language
Connect ideas with easy links like and, but, so, also.
structure
Finish with a short end line that sums up your view.
content
Your view on the topic is shown clearly.
content
You tie the idea to fairness and equal rights.
style
You use simple words that are easy to read.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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