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The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates differences in the average daily
sales
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 of the selected five food items at the Brisk Cafe in
winter
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 and
summer
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. The food items include hot
coffee
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, iced
coffee
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,
ice
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cream
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, soup and salad. One of the first things to note is that hot
coffee
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 was the best-selling in the
winter
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, with just over 70
servings
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. Soup followed with 50
servings
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,
while
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ice
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cream
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 and salad recorded lower figures, 23
servings
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. The lowest-selling item in cafes during the
winter
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 was iced
coffee
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, with only a mere 2
servings
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. There was a striking difference in figures in iced
coffee
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sales
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 between
winter
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 and
summer
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.
This
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 figure indicates a big difference, with the figure only showing about 2 in
winter
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 and around 40 in
summer
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. It was close, followed by the selling of
ice
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cream
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, which was 35
servings
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. In
winter
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, iced
coffee
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sales
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 were very low, with a figure of just around 2,
while
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 in
summer
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, hot
coffee
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sales
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 were still high, with
sales
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 of 30
servings
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that in
winter
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, hot
coffee
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 and soup are the top sellers,
while
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 in
summer
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, cold
coffee
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 and
ice
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cream
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 are the top sellers. It was
also
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 recorded that the biggest difference in
sales
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 between the two seasons was iced
coffee
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, winter, summer, coffee, ice, cream, servings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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