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Living in a county where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that learning languages is important.
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 it is a commonly held belief that living in a
country
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 where you must speak that
country
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's
language
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 can cause social and practical difficulties, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, being in a foreign place and learn its
language
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 is a great chance to develop.
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 with, one of the main advantages of learning that
country
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's
language
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 is the skill of learning a new
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 itself.
In other words
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, the ability
of speaking
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to speak
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 more than one
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 can open many doors for
future
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the future
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especially
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, especially
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 in careers.
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, being in a foreign place can shape your personality.
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, at the beginning when trying to speak a new
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language
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language,
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 some
people
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 might feel uncomfortable or disturbed, but
overtime
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this
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 would allow them to grow. Another point to consider is that
people
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 might become friendlier when dealing with them. It is
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 possible to say that
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, seeing
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 you try your best to learn their
language
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,
people
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 are more likely to appreciate your effort.
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, learning that
country
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's
language
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 not only helps to learn more about their culture and traditions but
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 can spread acceptance between countries.
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, some countries like China
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 and Egypt have started to exchange students and workers to foster understanding and social acceptance between the two nations. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that staying in a new
country
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 is a great way to
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learn
 its
language
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, and strengthen relationships between
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those who
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 have different nationalities.

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grammar
Fix grammar and spelling. Use short, clear sentences.
structure
Explain the other view a bit more, then give your view, to show task task.
vocabulary
Add one or two simple, real examples to show your point.
response
Your view is clear and you take a position.
coherence
You use linking words like To begin with and In addition.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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