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The internet has changed the world. Many people think it has solved everything, while others believe it has caused problems. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

The
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 has changed the way
people
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 live today. It has many good points and many bad points. Many
people
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 believe one of the other.
This
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there
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 are many advantages
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 first .
the
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communition
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communication
 with
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 is easy by
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social
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,
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everybady
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everybody
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 a
facebook
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Facebook
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 and email
you
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, you
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 can send many
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messages
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photos
second
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, the shopping is very easy , our
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people don't
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the
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 mall ,can
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 online
for
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in
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 many
country
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countries
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 in the
worde
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world
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different
application
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,
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finally
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 the
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internet
make
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 some
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 happy like kids
becous
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because
can
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in
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 video games and learn
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that
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there
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 are some disadvantages for the
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internet
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 not healthy you can problam in the eys and anther ills , isnt good for old pepole
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wiest of time make childrens late in studys he is bad for mains finaly , some pepole bad use in
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hackers In conclusion, the
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many
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many advantages.
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also
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 has some disadvantages.

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Plan your essay with a start, two main parts for good and bad things, and a short end
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Make one main thing in each part and show a small point
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The writing tries to show both good and bad sides
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There is an ending line

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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