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Band 4.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

Air,
water
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, food and shelter are the basic necessities of a human life. Despite
this
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, governments charging a price for clean
water
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 from the
people
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 is a sensational topic of discussion. I strongly believe that charging
people
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 for
water
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 can make them accountable and avoid the wastage of
water
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. My perspective on
this
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 is discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs. Humans have a tendency to take everything for granted if provided
free
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for free
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.
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, if the government is supplying
water
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 for free,
people
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 will never recognise how important it is to save
water
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.
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, most developed countries have a good source of clean
water
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whereas
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,
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 other
under developed
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underdeveloped
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 and developing countries often have problems finding a good source of
water
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. Globally, thousands of children are still dying because there is barely any
water
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 to drink.
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 why
,
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 it is important to make
people
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 aware of the importance of saving
water
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 by making them pay for it. A very important point
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 to be focused
here
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on here
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 is that
,
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 humans are the reason for the famine
that is
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 going around in the
world
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.
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,
people
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 started polluting the clean
water
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 resources in the
world
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creating
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, creating
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 a scarcity of
water
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.
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,
Ganga
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the Ganga
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river
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River
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 in the northern part of India is polluted by
throwing
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the disposal of
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 dead bodies after cremation.
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, there are a very few
people
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among
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in
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 the
world
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 protesting and campaigning to save
water
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and
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, and
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on the
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contrary
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contrary,
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 there are social media personalities wasting
water
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for creating
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to create
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a
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apply
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thirty second
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thirty-second
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 content for their platform.
To conclude
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, I strongly disagree that households should not have a free supply of
water
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 as it is highly important to
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emphasise
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 the fact that
despite
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, despite
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 being a basic
necessity
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necessity,
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 many
people
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 around the
world
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does
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do
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 not even have
water
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 to drink.

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task
Be sure your main view stays the same in all parts. Pick one side and stay with it.
task
Give only ideas that fit the topic. Explain why water should or should not be free with simple, real life reasons.
coherence
Plan your essay. Use four parts: intro, 2 body, and conclusion. Let each body have one key idea.
coherence
Use linking words well. For example, use and, but, so, because to show how ideas are tied.
task
The writer gives a clear view of the topic.
content
Some real life ideas are used as examples (like the Ganga river).

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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