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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Bringing in foreign workers to fill positions that domestic workers are unwilling to do can cause problems in the local community and should therefore be stopped. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that
economy
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the economy
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 of
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country
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a country
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denpends
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depends
 on human
resource
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resources
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;
however
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, opinions regarding
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 issue
.
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vary.
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While
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 some
people
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 argue that
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foreigners
 can be a
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substitute
to
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for
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 citizens, others present a counterargument.
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 providing workers from outside
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country
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the country
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 might be helpful, I firmly believe that
resedints
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residents
 have the
rights
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right
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 in their
country
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;
this
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 is because
indeviduales
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individuals
are owning
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own
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 the state, and
it
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apply
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also
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 government should
be trusted
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trust
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 them by improving their skills. To
bigen
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begin
 with, one of the rights of citizens in their states is that
presents
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present
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 the
postions
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positions
 for
people
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, so the government reduces the unemployment rate
which
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, which
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 is affecting on its economy.
In other words
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,
high
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a high
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 employment rate will cause many problems for
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country
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the country
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. For
examnple
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example
, in
COVID 19
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,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, the employment rate
raised
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rose
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 to
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a high-all-time
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high-all-time
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high all-time
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. Another important point is that governments have to trust
thier
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their
people
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, and support them by giving scholarships and training. Indeed,
foreigner
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foreign
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 workers
that
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apply
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provided by
adminstarions
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administrations
 have at least one or more specific certificates.
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, the State of Kuwait
,
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apply
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 brings workers from Egypt for building.
Moreover
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,
government
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the government
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 will
get
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apply
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benefits
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benefit
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of
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from
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 pricing
worker
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workers
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. In conclusion, some foreigners are willing to do special
works
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work
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;
nevertheless
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, I
maintan
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maintain
 that citizens will be better than them;
therefore
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, the
goverment
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government
 must give
thier resedints
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their residents
 an opportunity. In
addtion
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addition
,
people
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 inside
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the counrty
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counrty
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country
 know what is good for them.

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Task response
Be clear about your view at the start and keep it the same in all parts.
Planning
Plan the essay first. Make a small map of ideas before you write.
Coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Use simple words and link words to show how ideas go.
Examples
Give examples that fit what you say and are easy to see.
Grammar
Check spell and word form. Use common, easy words.
Content
The writer shows a clear view against foreign workers with some reason.
Structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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