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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, the causes of studying other
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becoming
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 increasingly controversial. Some people believe that
lingustic
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linguistic
 education is for
traveling
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travelling
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 or being expats overseas
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apply
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,
while
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other
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others
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people
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argue that there are several reasons to learn new languages. In
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 I will examine both views and provide my opinion. On the one hand, there is a belief that
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the aims
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 of learning
new
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a new
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languague
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language
 are for
journey
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a journey
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 or for
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working
 in other countries.
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 is because those reasons can be worth
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 for learners. It is true that studying new skills, especially
language
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skill
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skills
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,
consume
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consumes
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 a
lots
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 of time, energy and money to understand
foreigners
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 speaking.
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, linguistic learners should use their ability
of speaking
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to speak
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 other
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language
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languages
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 in
international
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an international
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 environment in order to gain more
experiences
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experience
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 or earn more income.
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, living in
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a domestic
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has
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environment has
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 less chance to use
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 as they may normally meet native speakers more than expats.
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, it is possible that the learner may forget what they have learn and that would be
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amount
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of
times
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time
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 and money.
Traveling
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 and working
in
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overseas
seem
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seems
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 to be worth for high investment and
strenghening
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strengthening
 their ability
of understanding
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to understand
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 other
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languages
.
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, others believe that learning foreign languages can be useful even in domestic
and
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settings and
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 still have plenty of
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oppotunities
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opportunities
 to achieve the goals without
traveling
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travelling
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 or having
job
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a job
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 in other countries. Since, in the
globalization
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globalisation
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 era, many
organizations
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organisations
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 have to incorporate
with
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foreigners
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 to develop themselves.
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, they have to acknowledge
about
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internation
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international
 trade laws for their compliance. So, the
language
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 student can have more
jobs
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job
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oppotunities
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opportunities
 in their own state and earn more income to worth
dedicated
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the dedicated
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 time and costs.
In addition
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, technologies like
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social media or social applications play an important role
to reshape
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in reshaping
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haman
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human
behavior
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behaviour
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 in their society. When people turn on their
smartphone
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smartphones
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, they can connect and interact with
foreigners
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.
Consequently
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, they will be able to practise their foreign
language
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 constantly. In conclusion, not only
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oppotunities
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opportunities
in
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overseas can offer linguistic learners to have
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a return
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 interest to accomplish their aims, but
also
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 in their own
country
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country,
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 where global roles and technologies provide them many
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oppotunities
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opportunities
 too. In my opinion, I learn second or third languages for entertaining myself as I can understand
foreigners
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such
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, such
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 as
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novels
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 and social media
contants
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content
.

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language
Fix many spelling and grammar mistakes; use short, simple sentences. This makes ideas easy to read.
structure
Make your point clearer. Start with a short intro that states your view, then link each paragraph to one idea, and finish with a clear opinion.
content
Add one or two real examples that fit the task, such as travel plans, work abroad, or trade between countries.
task response
The essay tries to cover both views and ends with a personal opinion.
coherence
There is a basic layout with an intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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