Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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that
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in
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should have more
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optional
subjects
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to learn
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to their major program
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while
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other people think that the main
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of those
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should be only attention for studying. In
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I will examine both views and provide my own opinion. On one hand, adding other
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, which may not be strongly related to
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the main
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subject in
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university
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the university
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programme,
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might
be useful knowledge for
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students
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. Selected
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could show other aspects or other theories which less exist in the main
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.
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, the
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could have support information to connect the dot that help them to see
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a clearer
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picture or even build up other skills.
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, when
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choose minor
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which are totally opposite to their major, it is
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a
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great
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opportunity
to open many doors of
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opportunities
in future.
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, a
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already
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knowledge about
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and if he or she
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Chinese language as
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a minor
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,
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after graduating
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university
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, that
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could
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as
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an economist
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in
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the domestic
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or in China.
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, every
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in colleges
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already intensively
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verified
and qualified
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it means that
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knowledge is far more
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than online courses.
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, those
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student
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students
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should have
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oppotunity
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opportunity
to access
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those
classes
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when they are studying in
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.
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, it is important that
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student
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students
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should focus and have
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enough
time for their major learning,
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especially
the
subjects
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that require density of training and precise information
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such
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as
medical
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medicine
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,
laws
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law
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engineer
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engineering
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. As they contain numerous and difficult information, most
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students
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should be well
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on those main
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.
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, those could not finish or accomplish their programme or
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unsatisfy
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unsatisfactory
GPA.
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Furthermore
, having a lot of
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to complete creates
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stressful
and
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learners
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evidence
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that shows the
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negative
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of
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multitasking. Not only
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function
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some
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times, but
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students
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may have
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insufficient
time to rest.
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, those college
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with their
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physical
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mental health as they have to work hard in different
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of
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. In conclusion,
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additional class seems to be helpful for
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students
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in various ways, some drawbacks will
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to
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for
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learners
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. In my opinion, I think that optional
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are essential
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however
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however,
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the faculty or
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consultant should offer advice to balance their time
together with
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the student
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student
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students
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themselves and should keep track
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the
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'
perfomance
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performance
to find some improvement.

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structure
Use clear plan: intro, 2 body para, then a short end. Keep one idea per paragraph.
language
Fix run of error and spell. Use simple, short words.
content
Give a real example for each view and for your own view to show proof.
task
The essay shows both views and has a view of your own.
coherence
There is a clear set up with intro, body and end.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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