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Writing Samples
Band 3

The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, technologic is
the
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a
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sighnificnt
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significant
 tool to communicate between
people
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 in whole the
wourld
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world
which
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, which
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 means there
is
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are
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 no
visitings
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visits
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 or
meets until
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meetings
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 between
persons
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people
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 from the same family. I
beleive
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believe
 that social
media
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have
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has
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 a lot of
advanges
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advantages
but
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, but
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in
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at
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 the same time
ther
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there
 are
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a number
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 of disadvantages. On
one
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the one
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 hand, social
media
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 can be so useful and helpful. We can
connecte
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connect
 with
people
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 at any time, call them, and cheat with them. In
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addition
additon
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additon,
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 there is no space because we know their news and how they do.
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, I
have
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apply
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studied
at
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in
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Jappan
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Japan
 for four years
ago
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apply
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, so I
was catch
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caught
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 up with my family
by
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via
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wats
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WhatsApp
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up
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apply
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. We
was
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were
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 open
vedios
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video
 calls, so I did not
fell
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feel
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 only or sad,
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I
fell
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feel
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I
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like I
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am on cloud nine.
On the other hand
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, the big use of
esocial
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social
media
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 can
impect
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impact
 badly. A lot of
people
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depeand
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depend
 on
technlogic
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technology
 more, so that makes the
realship
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relationship
 between
people
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weeknees
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weak
.
For
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example
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 my friend does not stay and talk with her mom and dad in
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real life
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as
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 a result of
she
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which she
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 always faces changes and diffecoults to deal with her family.
To sum up
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, we should
to
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balance between social
media
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 and
face to face
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face-to-face
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 meetings.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 there are many risks in the near
futear
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future
 if we completely use social
mesia
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media
, so we should be
attintion
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attentive
 and do not leave our old
culthure
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culture
, because we need to keep our strong
relashnshp
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relationship
.

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task
Plan your writing. Say your view in a simple line at the end. Then add two clear ideas to support your view.
coherence
Use clear link words. For example, on one hand, on the other hand, and then say your own view.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences. Check spell small common words so the text is easy to read.
examples
Give one or two clear examples that relate to real life, and make sure they fit the idea.
content
The essay shows both sides of the issue.
content
It uses real life examples.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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