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Band 4

Friendships that take place online are not as meaningful as those where people meet each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Friends
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plays
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play
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 a significant role in our
life
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lives
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. They can support in difficult situations, share good news with you
and
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, and
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 just sit next to you and listen to music.
However
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, friendship can be different. There are lots of people who have a perfect contact with somebody whom they know only by messages or calls, but they
still
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are still
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 in supportive and amazing relationships. As for me, I prefer to spend
time
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 with my
friends
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 in real life and have
a
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the
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 possibility to meet with each other even for a shopping
together
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trip together
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, so I agree that offline
communication
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 is more meaningful than online.
Fist
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 of all, I am a person who dislikes spending many hours
in
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on
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 social networks. I really adore talking in real
time
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 with my
friends
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. I feel it
easier
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is easier
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 and more emotional. Offline
communication
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 means that
you haven’t
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youn’t have
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 to wait
unpredictable
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an unpredictable
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time
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 for an answer, you have a companion next to you and they answer immediately. I really hate situations
then
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 you text with somebody and
then
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 they don’t respond to your message for a long
time
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. Unfortunately,
such
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 situations always happen, just because anyone can
distract
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be distracted
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 and the
dialog
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dialogue
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 finishes.
Moreover
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, I love having
friends
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 that I can meet anywhere or just suggest
to
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apply
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going somewhere together.
For example
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, I have a friend living next to me and we meet
some times
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sometimes
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 a week just to drink a coffee or cook something delicious at home.
This
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 friend feels like my new family
and
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, and
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 we
really
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are really
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 into our home meetings. For
me
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me,
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 it’s hard to choose online
communication
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 rather than my example.
However
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, I have
friends
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 with whom we meet very rarely because of living in different cities and, unfortunately, our
communication
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became
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has become
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 less
deepen
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deep
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 than it was
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then
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when
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 we met weekly. Summing up, I agree with the statement that
opportunity
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apply
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seeing each other face to face makes a friendship more meaningful.

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task
Plan your essay first. Write the main idea, then two reason, then one or two small examples. End with a short idea.
structure
Make clear paragraphs. Put one idea in each paragraph. Use linking words to show order: first, also, but, finally.
content
You show a clear view and take a side.
content
You use a real life example about meeting a friend.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • non-verbal communication cues
  • depth of understanding
  • spontaneous
  • genuine moments
  • shared interests
  • sense of physical presence
  • evolve
  • constant connectivity
  • nurture friendships
  • busy schedules
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