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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the advanced world, new innovations give
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birth
new
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 techno
thing
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 even in the matter of communication. Individuals send pictures
instead
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 of saying some
words
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 which can not be
expersive
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expressive
 in the same way as
words
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clasifies
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classify
 the meaning of everything. I totally disagree that small
vedios
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videos
is
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much
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a much
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 better way
instead
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 of
words
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 or letters. Photograph have their meaning that can be used in different ways
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for
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, for
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example
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example,
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 whenever they feel
emotional
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emotional,
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 they use
same
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the same
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 picture
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, but
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which
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 can not describe what exactly they feel.The power can not be denied in any way. Each word has its own meaning. The whole communication may be based on
picture
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a picture
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but
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, but
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 to explain that as
well
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 they need
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 . Even in the matter of
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 how pictures can be useful as they are
also
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 a part of society.
The another
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 argument in
the favour of
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favour of the
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 statement is that
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 have their clear
meanings
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meanings,
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 where confusion can not
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arise
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 leads to some conflicts. To exemplify ,
some time
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sometimes
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 during the chat
partners
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, partners
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 send some
emoji
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but
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 another person can not figure
it
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apply
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out the exact emotions behind that.
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Thus
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 picture can be helpful in the illustration
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still
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 that needs
words
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for
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example
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 graphs tell us a lot more about financial situations
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 without
words
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 , they are meaningless. So
words
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 have their own importance. In conclusion,
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 have much more significance not only in our lives but
also
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 in
the
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communication.
Words
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 explain all the things
into
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 better ways.

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structure
Plan a short intro that states your view, then 2 or 3 body parts with one main idea each, and a short conclusion.
content
Add a simple example for each point and explain how it shows your idea.
language
Watch grammar and use simple tenses. Use present simple for facts and simple past for past actions.
task response
You take a clear view against the idea that videos are always better.
coherence
You see how pictures can show mood and that words can fit with images.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visual communication
  • Emotional impact
  • Transcend language barriers
  • Universality
  • Infographic
  • Memory retention
  • Misinterpretation
  • Manipulation
  • Complementary
  • Evocative
  • Multimedia
  • Contextual understanding
  • Ambiguity
  • Visual literacy
  • Instant communication
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