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The diagrams below give information about a plan to redevelop an industrial site.

The diagrams below give information about a plan to redevelop an industrial site.
The diagram shows the difference in layout between the industrial site nowadays and the future plan
of
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for
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 it.
Overall
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, the biggest changes touched indoors and buildings, in the plan
less
Punctuation problem
, less
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 free , outdoors stayed the same. Currently, the field consists of a number of offices in the southern part. The main entrance and reception place
in
Verb problem
is in
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 the North, under Chimney Road. The big yard in the centre and a round parking lot on the west side, south of
it
Punctuation problem
it,
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 is a storage building. The factory and the biggest structure in the
field
Punctuation problem
field,
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 is located in the south-east corner of the industrial site. In the future, offices will be replaced by parking garages.
Where the
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The
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 entrance will be three houses with two bedrooms and a communal garden in the south of it. On the west side of the area will be houses with trees and four bedrooms. On the west side will be some apartments with a parking area next to
it
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them
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.
Furthermore
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, the main road will remain unchanged.

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