Many people like to wear fashinable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good or bad thing?

There is no denying the fact that nowadays
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to purchase stylish
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in order to follow the latest trends. In
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like to wear fashionable items and how
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there are many reasons behind the obsession of wearing fashionable
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, with the aid of technology, fashion trends spread rapidly to anyone who has social media platforms.
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, by seeing others purchase fashionable
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,
people
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have a desire to
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them to fit in their
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"social status". Another reason is aggressive marketing by each brand.
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, companies hire celebrities or social media influencers to persuade their customers to
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their latest fashion clothing, which can cause a big temptation for followers. When it comes to the problems of wearing stylish outfits, there are several. Sometimes it can be exhausting and even pointless. It is
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possible to say that not every trend would suit everyone's body shape or
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tone.
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, a recent study at Harvard University has shown that 80% of shoppers who follow trendy garments are not satisfied with their purchases.
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,
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approach might lead to financial problems.
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might start borrowing from friends and family just to keep up with the latest fashion trend. In conclusion, there are many reasons
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why young
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like to wear fashionable
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. It is
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true that
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trend might result in disappointments for consumers
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lead to drowning in debt.

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task
Make the view on if it is good or bad clear in one line at the start or end.
task
Give a quick look at both sides. Say one or two good parts of fashion, then focus on bad parts.
language
Fix small grammar mistakes and spell wrong words.
language
Use less long sentences. Use short, clear and straight sentence.
content
The topic is clear and there are reasons given for why people wear fashion.
coherence
Link words like first, for example, also are used to join ideas.
evidence
There is an example with numbers and a study which adds detail.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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