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Some people believe that anyone can make art( painting, music, poetry) while others believe people with specific ability can. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today`s fast-paced world, everyone believes that anyone can learn art and crafts,
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people
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 argue that for
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 an individual
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 something new or it is a natural creativity. In my opinion,
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 is a god gifted ability,
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skill
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 can be learned by hard work and dedication.
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 think that every person can learn art and creativity,
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 as music,
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 and crafting.
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, humans are trying to study
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however
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,
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few
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skills
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 can be learned with good focus.
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,
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 can
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 their ability with proper training and guidance of experts, so
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often study some
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, there was
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research done by Western Sydney University which shows
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 the field.
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, the majority of
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 believe that some
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 cannot be learn by coaching and hard work.
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, many mankind never try and spend their important time learning
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 and painting, because
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 developed naturally in humans over the centuries.
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,
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 kind of skill is not even very hard to develop
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 sometimes it is impossible to
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 there is a higher chance of
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 time and money
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 these abilities.
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, there was an article in the Times of India which mentioned some blessed abilities can not be developed by everyone,
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 as cricket, high jumping and singing. In conclusion, some art is possible to develop by anyone with hard work and passion,
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 in my view, few abilities only come by god gift in artists, there are zero possibilities to
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task response
Task response: State your view clearly. Show a plan in the intro. In each body paragraph, keep one main idea and give a simple example. Finish with a clear opinion.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words to move ideas. Start with a clear intro, then 2 body parts, then a short conclusion. Use words like and, but, so, also, however to join ideas.
strength
The writer tries to talk about both sides of the topic.
strength
The writer ends with a view of their own.
strength
Some examples are used to back points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratize (v) - to make something accessible to everyone
  • innate (adj) - inborn; natural
  • subjective (adj) - based on or influenced by personal feelings, tastes, or opinions
  • resonant (adj) - deep, clear, and continuing to sound or affect
  • recognition (n) - acknowledgement of someone’s status or merit
  • acclaim (n) - enthusiastic and public praise
  • self-taught (adj) - having acquired knowledge or skills without formal education or training
  • formally trained (adj) - having received education or training in a structured and official program
  • appreciation (n) - recognition and enjoyment of the good qualities of someone or something
  • amateurs (n) - individuals engaging in an activity without professional skill
  • artisan (n) - a worker in a skilled trade, especially one that involves making things by hand
  • aesthetic (adj) - concerned with beauty or the appreciation of beauty
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