Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agreee or disagree?

Some individuals think that some
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are
better
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acceptable for men, others for
women
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. In my opinion,
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works
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should not should not be divided into groups by sex, for reasons which I will outline in the following essay. The works which more suitable for different genres are a full stereotype that has grown over the years.
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, in the past ,
women
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could not get a job in general,
due to
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patriarchal
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the patriarchal
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system. These reasons made certain
jobs
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more natural for
women
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, like as seamstress.
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, some works which have popular among ladies
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have more female workers.
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, men can always get an education, because of that they can be different prestigious persons like doctors, teachers and judges.
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is a leg of the stereotypes, which in the future will make gender divisions.
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, for
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it does not matter which genre you are
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people can work in different
jobs
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and break stereotypes for that, showing examples of how to defeat
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system. Nowadays, a lot of judges, doctors and teachers are
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,
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, my mom businesswoman and she equals other men, my aunt is are very famous doctor. In conclusion, I want to say that in our time we should specify
jobs
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by the genre or think that one is more suitable than the other. Our century is a century of equality , and everyone can be anyone, and sex does not matter.

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task response
State your view in the first sentence and keep a clear answer through the essay.
coherence
Group ideas in clear paragraph with one main idea each; use simple link words to show flow.
examples
Give more clear, real examples about jobs, not just family cases.
language
Check grammar and word form; fix mistakes with plural 'works' vs 'jobs' and wrong phrases.
thesis
The writer shows a clear view that sex should not split jobs.
language
The essay is readable with simple words.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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