Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

With the explosive growth of population, people have built dense housing ,which

occupied

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occupies

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plenty of space, and

someone

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some

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holds

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hold

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the view that planting

trees

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is more essential than building more housing in towns and

cities

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. In my opinion, I

agreed

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with the idea, and here are

reasons

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the reasons

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following

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apply

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. First of all, planting more

trees

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in the open spaces improves

urban

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the urban

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ecological environment,

Since

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since

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trees

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are able to absorb carbon dioxide and

air

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pollutants,

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then

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and then

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release oxygen.

As a result

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, the

air

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quality in

cities

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has improved,

along with

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enhancement

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the enhancement

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of people's

life

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lives

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, a mature tree can absorb about 20 kilograms of carbon dioxide per year, which is vital for improving urban

air

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quality.

Trees

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serve as an

air

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filter

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that that's why it's vital to plant more

trees

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Furthermore

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trees

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functions

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function

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as maintaining urban balance of biodiversity,

due to

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providing habitats for birds, insects, and other organisms,

consequently

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leading to enriching urban biodiversity.

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, they

also

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help with soil and water conservation, reducing the risk of urban waterlogging by absorbing rainwater. A recent study in the UK illustrates that if tree cover in these

cities

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were to double to 30

percent

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per cent

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from the current average of just under 15

percent

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per cent

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, the city could experience an average decrease in summer temperatures of 0.4 degrees Celsius, reducing heat-related deaths of creature by nearly 40

percent

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per cent

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Therefore

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, planting more

trees

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is very helpful in maintaining the ecological environment. In conclusion,

Planting

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planting

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trees

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cities

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has many benefits, not only improving the quality of the environment, but

also

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enhancing the

level

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quality

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of life and mental health of residents.

Hence

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, I agree to plant more

trees

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cities

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or towns

instead

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of building more housing.

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Aug 30, 2025

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grammar

Fix grammar and tense: for example 'In my opinion, I agreed' should be 'In my opinion, I agree'; watch subject-verb and article use.

structure

Make a clear start: give a short intro that state the topic and your view; end with a simple conclusion.

coherence

Link ideas with simple connectors; use 'First', 'Next', 'Also', 'However' to show order.

content

Use simple, clear examples and data; explain how each example supports your point.

language

Reduce long sentences; use short, clear sentences to aid read.

content

You state your view clearly.

content

You use a number and a study to back a point.

structure

Ideas go in order in most parts.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

283 words

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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

You have recently moved to a new neighborhood. Write a letter to your friend about your new home. In your letter, describe your new house or apartment explain why you moved invite your friend to come and visit

You were recently impressed by a staff member at a supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter: • Describe the situation • Explain how you were helped • State what you are going to do as a result of this good experience

In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part-time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter • explain why you want to reduce your working hours • say which hours you would like to work • describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer