IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to local council. In your letter Give details how you and your friends or family use the centre Explain why the sport and leisure centre is important for the local community Describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

Dear sir/ madam I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to bring your utmost attention to a very serious matter of closing
sports
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the sports
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 and leisure centre. I am a local resident here in Oakville
town
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apply
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, and
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 news of closure has left many individuals in sadness.
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,
me
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apply
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and
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my friends,
we
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I
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 go to
sports
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the sports
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 centre every week to prepare for our hockey championship next year. I've seen and witnessed many senior citizens who are retired and
had
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have
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 nothing to do at home
,
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;
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 they
had
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have
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 a great place at
leisure
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the leisure
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 centre to meet and
socialize
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socialise
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 with different cultures and make new friends.
As a result
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 of
this
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 Closure, many individuals will have no place to practice for their favourite sports and the outcome will be full of
dipression
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depression
 and anxiety for many individuals. There for I request
to
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that
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hard
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the hard
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 of council
to
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apply
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reconsider their decision
of shutting
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to shut
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this
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 facility, as it impacts many lives and their
life styles
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lifestyles
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. Thank you Sincerely

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task
Start with a clear goal in the first line and keep a formal tone.
coherence
Split the letter into clear parts: who you are and how you use the centre, why it helps, and what may happen if it closes.
language
Use short, simple sentences and check spellings. Keep words like 'centre' and 'town'.
greeting closing
End with a full sign off and your name for a formal letter.
content
You show care for your town and people.
content
You give a real example of how the centre helps your group.
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