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Many people believe that bicycle is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport. However, it is still unpopular in many countries. What are the reasons for that? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among the wider population?

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Introduction
Although
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 the
using
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use
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 of a
bicycle
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 as a way of transport is
more healther
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healthier
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 for us
as well as
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 for our environment , it is not popular among many
people
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 to
use
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 it.
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however
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, there are several things that we can
manege
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manage
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 to
made
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make
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 the usage of the
bicycle
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 wider
between
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among
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 the population of our
cityies
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cities
.
Body paragraph 1
In my opinion ,
i
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I
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 think the reasons
behinde
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behind
 why using
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 is unpopular among
people
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 because ,
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firstly
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firstly,
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 most
people
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 find that
cars
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 are
more faster and
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faster and more
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 comfortable than
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bicycle
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bicycles
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.
Secondly
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,
bicycles
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 need more physical work
.
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,
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and
as a
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result
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result,
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 many
people
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chose
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choose
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 to
use
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cars
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 over
bicycles
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.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,if we want
people
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 to
use
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bicycles
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effectivly
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effectively
,we should make the
popluation
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population
 more mature about the benefits of using
the
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apply
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bicycles
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 over
cars
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. Starting from schools
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for
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, for
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 example , making a free parking for
bicycles
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whic
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which
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use
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it
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apply
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for free,
also
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 it is a great idea if
cietyies biuld stautions
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cities build stations
 around the public places for renting
bicycles
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, which would
be costing
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cost
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people
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 less than the car's gas.
Conclusion
To sum
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up it all
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it all up
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, using
bicycles
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 will be part of
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the populations
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populations
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population's
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 everyday
rotuin
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routine
 if governments make it easy to
reach
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use
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 by
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people
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apply
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in the
cityies
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city
 streets, and
as a
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result
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result,
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 our environment will be
more healther
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healthier
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 if
people
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reduced
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reduce
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 the
ues
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use
 of
cars
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.

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planning
Plan the essay first. Write a short intro, then two body parts, then a short end. Use one idea per sentence and link ideas with clear words such as 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so'.
content
Make clear reasons. Each reason should have a link to a solution. Give one small example for each point.
grammar
Check how you use verbs and spell words. Use simple present for facts. Use 'it' and 'they' correctly.
cohesion
Use joining words to show how ideas go from one to next.
style
Keep sentences short. Use full stops well. Start a new line for a new paragraph.
structure
The essay shows the topic well and talks about both sides.
content
Some ideas are clear and near to the task.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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