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Some people consider that teachers should focus on academics more than motivating students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that, in today's world, it is crucial to
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 in pupils for the benefit of society.
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 some argue that professors are spending more time on educated
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, others believe that investing in motivating pupils is crucial for the benefit of different sectors.
This
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 essay will examine how focusing on various types of motivated
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 might help and present my own view. On the one hand, in today's world, professional skills are indispensable for the job sector.
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, the companies' need goes beyond the academic needs; the need now is for a skilled employee with passion and motivation who meets the requirements for any market.
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, KOC, the Kuwait Oil Company, in their latest announcement, announced the need for an entry-level employee who meets their professional requirement for the job vacancy.
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, the time spent on a motivated student is less than the academic one, since the motivated candidate has the ability to learn and gain knowledge in different conditions and can work in different places he or she is given.
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, Mark John, the German specialist, has a weak academic background , but his critical thinking has led him to achieve various achievements.
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, people hold different opinions on
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 subject, and
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 , the higher authorities should invest in motivating different species of
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 for the benefit of society. In my opinion, I firmly disagree with the view , and
this
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 essay shows the benefits of spending time and effort for all
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.

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task response
Make your view clear in the intro and end with a strong line that shows your view.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph and give simple proof or reason.
examples
Give real and simple examples that fit the point. Avoid odd names.
language
Check spelling and fix big errors to help the reader.
structure
You have an intro and a conclusion.
content
You touch on both sides, not just one idea.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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