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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart illustrates key information about the average weekly income of families living in one country in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there are eight categories which are food, housing, fuel and power, clothing and footwear, household
goods
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, personal
goods
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, transportation, and leisure.
In addition
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, the trend varied and fluctuated over the period.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1968, there was a significant increase in food consumption by 35 per
cent
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.
In contrast
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, fuel and power experienced a sharp fall, by approximately 4 per
cent
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.
However
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, housing, clothing, and footwear remained at the same level, by 10 %.
Moreover
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, families were spending the same amount on household
goods
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, personal
goods
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, and transportation, by around 8 per
cent
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. In 2018, there was a noticeable drop in spending on fuel and power, and personal
goods
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,
as
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 below 5%,
whereas
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 housing and leisure claimed dramatically, to roughly 20 per
cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • proportion
  • weekly income
  • accounted for
  • total expenditure
  • housing and utility expenses
  • transportation costs
  • other expenses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • leisure activities
  • spending patterns
  • witnessed a considerable rise
  • experienced a substantial increase
  • allocating a larger proportion
  • reducing their expenditure
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