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Some people believe that it is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
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 believe that it is important to give
gifts
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 to
friends
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 and family to
show
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 that we
care
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 about them.
Others
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 think that there are better
ways
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 to
show
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 that we
care
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. Discuss
both
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views
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 and give your
opinion
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. Some
people
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 believe that it is important to give
gifts
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 to
friends
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 and family to
show
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 that we
care
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 about them.
Others
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 think that there are better
ways
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 to
show
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 that we
care
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. Discuss
both
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views
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 and give your
opinion
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. Some
people
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 believe that it is important to give
gifts
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 to
friends
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 and family to
show
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 that we
care
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 about them.
Others
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 think that there are better
ways
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 to
show
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 that we
care
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. Discuss
both
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views
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 and give your
opinion
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. Some
people
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 believe that it is important to give
gifts
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 to
friends
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 and family to
show
Use synonyms
 that we
care
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 about them.
Others
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 think that there are better
ways
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 to
show
Use synonyms
 that we
care
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. Discuss
both
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views
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 and give your
opinion
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.

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If you want a higher score, write a clear answer that covers both views and then give your own view with reasons.
structure
Use simple linking words to show how ideas fit together and add a short intro and a short conclusion.
content
The topic is clear and you note two sides.
structure
You show you want to state your own view.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tangible symbols
  • Affection
  • Materialism
  • Cultural traditions
  • Impact
  • Relationships
  • Quality time
  • Acts of service
  • Communication
  • Shared experiences
  • Equating
  • Emotional presence
  • Physical presence
  • Material possessions
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