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The two maps below show am island , before and after the constuction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show am island , before and after the constuction of some tourist facilities.
To begin
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 with, the general view of the
island
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 was Reception
on
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at
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 the entrance and up of it was a traditional restaurant. Regarding to western centre of the
island
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 were some old houses. After that , in the corner of the western part was the Beach
which
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, which
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 available swimming too. Turning to the eastern side of the
island
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 were conventional accommodations too. In terms of the eastern centre of
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island
Correct article usage
the island
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,
initially
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 it was a pool,
then
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 it
destroyed
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was destroyed
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 and istead of
it
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its
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,
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place, were
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were built the houses
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the houses were built
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. Turning to of east was a small diving school. In
additional
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addition
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, allocated the land for the surf beach. Regarding to restaurant in the Northern centre was enlarged to a "shop and restaurant" in order to add facilities for consumers. And below it was a reception , there weren’t any changes. And there was an expansion of the green zone.
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, the western side of the
Island
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 did not have any reconstruction or new facilities.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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