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The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.

The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.
The data illustrates
number
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the number
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 of
peoples
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people
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 in different regions between 2003 , 2025 and 2050.
Overall
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,
Indonesia
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 hold the 1st rank as compared with other nations along
increased
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with increasing
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numbers
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,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 the least degree was seen in
italy
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Italy
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, which
is
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apply
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consistenlty
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consistently
drooped
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dropped
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down
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apply
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from the
year
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 2003, 2025, 2050. After analysing the table, it can be seen
,
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apply
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 that in the
year
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of
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apply
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2003
Argentia
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Argentina
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holds
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had
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the
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a
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 34
numbers
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 of
polpulation
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34 million
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 and 238
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million by
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by
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for
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Indonesia
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respectively
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, respectively
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,
although
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Indonesia
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ranked
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had
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 at highest
numbers
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 .
On the other hand
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,
italy
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Italy
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 and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea share 54 and 48
correspondly
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correspondingly
 along the in total which shows
least
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the least
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differnce
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difference
 between
both
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the
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.
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two.
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Also
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,
In
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in
show examples
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year
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the year
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 2025,
Indonesia
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 holds the same position
and
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, and
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 there is
minor
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a minor
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 elevation
the
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in the
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 growth of Argentina. Apart from that, in Italy it is seen to
dipped
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dip
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 down from
last
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 rank to 47
and
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, and
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
korea
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Korea
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 gained 4% from the
last
Linking Words
 record.
However
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,
In
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in
show examples
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year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2050
Add a comma
2050,
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Indonesia
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 reached
at
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apply
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its peak level
and
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, and
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 Agrentia shows a little bit
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of gorwing
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gorwing
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growing
 phase from
last
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year
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 and
hold
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holds
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 the 1st position
from
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among
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the
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apply
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other nations.
Furthermore
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, Italy shows fluctuation in the
numbers
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 from the
last
Linking Words
year
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 and
hold
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holds
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least
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the least
show examples
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numbers
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number
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 of
peoples
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people
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 in their country
apart
Punctuation problem
. Apart
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Linking Words
this
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from this
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,
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea hold the same position as it is.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words indonesia, numbers, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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