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You recently stayed at your friends's place to look after the house while he/she is away. you accidently damaged something in his/her house. write a letter to your friend. in your lettter you should describe what the accident was explain when it happened. suggest how you damage can be fixed.

Dear, Lisa Hey! How is your holiday going? I hope you are having fun in the Netherlands. Anyway, I want to tell you something about my clumsiness that happened just yesterday. Yesterday, I went straight to your house after my working schedule finished. It is about 5pm when I arrived at your house. I felt so sleepy because I woke up really early yesterday morning. But that night, I had so much work to do. Despite going to sleep, I decided to walk around your kitchen and search for coffee to keep me awake. I opened the refrigerator and found your leftover Starbucks coffee in a big bottle. I knew I could not drink that much coffee, so I went to the dining room, looking for a cup, and poured it. But
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 is where it happened. Maybe because I was so sleepy and out of focus, I poured it too much, and it spilt on your new rug. I was so shocked, and I tried to clean it up, but the stain
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 left. I know
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 is really upsetting for you, but I already searched the shop that sells that same rug. I already found the shop, and
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 it is not that far from my office. So I will buy it tomorrow evening after work. I am really sorry for what has already happened. I know that it was my fault, and I will be more careful next time. I hope you will forgive me for my clumsiness. Looking forward to hearing from you, Best Regards, Jk

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structure
Make ideas clear: say the accident, when it was and how you fix it in small steps.
style
Use short lines and keep lines short to help read ease.
coherence
Put one main idea in each part.
tone
You say sorry and you plan to fix it.
content
You tell when it was and what you did next.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accident
  • damage
  • apologize
  • vase
  • cleaning
  • knocked over
  • repair
  • replace
  • sincere
  • inconvenience
  • context
  • extent
  • broken
  • chipped
  • vacuuming
  • solution
  • cost
  • reassure
  • unintentional
  • friendly greeting
  • positive note
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