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Some people think it is more important to plant more tree in open areas in towns and cities than provide more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Trees
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 are one of the most essential elements for a human being's survival. As
people
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 are evolving,
trees
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 are being cut down
by
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at
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 a massive rate to make them use for various purposes like housing, furniture and etc.
This
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 becomes a major issue in the
cities
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 where
environment
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the environment
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 is
effected
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affected
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due to
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imbalance
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an imbalance
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 of
ecological
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the ecological
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 structure. 
This
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 makes
people
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beleive
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believe
 that planting more
trees
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are
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is more
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 important than
the
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apply
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provinding
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providing
house
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housing
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 in the developed towns. I agree with the statement that societies need to grow more plants to have less polluted
air
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 and water sources.
Due to
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growing
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the growing
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number of
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population, forests are being replaced by agricultural land, making new housing and other purposes.
This
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 ongoing activity creates an imbalance in the environment
which
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, which
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 causes a potential threat to the human race.
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 deforestation, forest land is being used for
the
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farming purposes and building more
cities
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 to
accomadate
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accommodate
 more
people
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. Plenty of
cities
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 are under the
crises
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crisis
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 of having
bad
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a bad
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air
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 quality
index
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index,
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 where
people
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 are suffering from breathing problems like Asthma, lung cancer and many critical health problems
due to
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 pollution.
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, places like Delhi, India and
Shangai
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Shanghai
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, China
has
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 a high
migratiion
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migration
 rate where
people
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 are leaving these
cities
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 to find a better alternative in
a seek
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 of fresh
air
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. Many countries have already started working to tackle
this
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 problem, where developed
cities
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 are being modified by taking green
intiative
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initiative
 projects that
priortize
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prioritise
 sustainability by implementing renewable energy sources and improving waste
mangement
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management
.
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,
cities
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 like Copenhagen, Denmark
actively
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, actively
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 reduce
its
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their
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 carbon footprint to enhance
air
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 and water quality. There are more steps that can be taken to prevent
the
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cities
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 from overpopulation by making new locations where similar facilities would be provided to
diverse
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diversify
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 the
people
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. Newly
well planned
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well-planned
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 towns have
desigenated
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designated
number
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a number
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 of
trees
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 per mile to control nature
where
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, where
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people
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 have to take
a
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apply
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permission to cut down
the
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a
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 tree
even
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, even
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 from
thier
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their
 backyard.
To conclude
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, new
cities
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 should be planned in a way that
it
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apply
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would
make
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have
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any
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no
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 negative impact on
the
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apply
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nature. It should have enough parks and forest reserve areas where
trees
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 can be grown
but
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, but
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chop
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not chopped
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 down.

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planning
In the intro, give a clear view of how much you agree. State it in one short line.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea and a clear topic sentence.
linking
Use simple link words to show how ideas connect (for example, 'also', 'but', 'therefore').
language
Check spelling and grammar; fix common errors and keep word form steady.
examples
Give one or two simple examples that directly fit the idea in each paragraph.
stance
The essay shows a clear view and tries to argue for the trees plan.
content
It uses real places as examples, which helps link talk to life.
relevance
It shows care for air and water and for health, which fits the task.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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