The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019.

The bar chart presents the total number of employees across five different tourism-related sectors in 2009 and 2019.

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, almost all industries experienced an increase except for the culture sector.

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, the accommodation business accounted for the largest proportion in 2009,

whereas

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food services dominated in 2019. In 2009, about 299.200 employees worked in hotels and other accommodation.

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was followed by sports at 284.700, which was slightly higher than the food industry at 283.400. Meanwhile, a small minority of 60.900 workers chose to work in travel agencies

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82.800 were employed in cultural places

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as museums or galleries. In 2019, the food industry formed the largest proportion of the workforce, standing at 357.700. Sports,

on the other hand

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, consistently represented the second largest of employment, with 345.700 employees, and was trailed by the accommodation business at 306.000.

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sports rose to 114.200 in 2019, culture dropped to 77.400 and became the least significant contributor that year.

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