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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read entertainment books because they think it is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Why?

The question of whether parents should allow their children to read entertainment
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along with
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 academic
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 is very debated nowadays and has divided public opinion.
This
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 essay will try to shed light on my disagreement
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 the question. First of all, it's the absolute duty of
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 to read attentively their academic
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 so that they can achieve success in their academic exams.
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, continuous alignment with academic
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will
 definitely render them
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,
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etc
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. In order to alleviate these, they could pass awhile with story
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 appropriate to their age.
This
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 will certainly cheer them up and will help to release
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the stresses
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stresses
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 accumulated in their brain.
Secondly
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,
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 pertinent to mention that
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 are required to have good imagination power. Obviously, good imagination
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leads to good innovation. Descriptively, innovation starts with dreams
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if
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 we hadn't
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 big, we would not have achieved great innovations. Story
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specially
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especially
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 science fiction
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books
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books,
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 are a great source that
instill
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 imagination power into the
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minds
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 of
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children.
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,
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 undeniable that apart from pursuing academic lectures, it's
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 required to expand
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' horizon of
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knowledge
. Academic
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 are
stricty
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strictly
 confined to particular subject matters and put
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 there only. Evidently, knowledge is not only bound to
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 but encompasses everything from the cradle of a baby to the deathbed of an older person. So a good story book that covers educational information can enrich a student with new
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 of information.
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, based on the discussions mentioned above, my stand is against the notion that
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 should read academic
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 only. Rather, they should read amusing and informative
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 their free time that broaden their knowledge and help to reduce
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 from fastidious academic lectures.

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structure
Plan your idea first and say your view early. Then give 2 or 3 reasons and end with a short end line.
coherence
Make a paragraph for each idea. Use small link words like also, but, for example to help flow.
grammar
Check your spelling and grammar. Fix wrong words like willd, knowleoge, strictly. Use simple form and one tense.
idea
Clear view is shown against the idea.
structure
Uses a list of reasons to support your view.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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