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The map below shows the development of the village of Rynemouth between 1995 and the present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Rynemouth between 1995 and the present.
The map shows the upgrades of the village of Rynemouth since 1995 to the present.
Overall
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, the changes touched most parts of the countryside, except for the sea and two roads which have a North-west direction and are parallel to the sea ,
secondly
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, a cafe on a beach and houses along the first road. In the past, in the sea was a big fishing port for four boats, on the beach was a fish market , and shops across the drive.
Furthermore
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, above is the area of houses with driveways, on the right side to the north-east is a huge farmland and below it is a forest park.
Also
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, in the east, there is a hotel along the road. Nowadays, most of the territory has undergone changes.
In contrast
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, the market was replaced by apartments and shops , by restaurants, and the port was removed altogether.
Moreover
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, a car park was built next to the hotel along the drive, and above it, there are now tennis courts and a golf course.
In addition
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, an avenue to the west and a couple of houses along it were added to the residential area.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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