Some museum and art galeries charge admission fees while other have free entry. Do you think the advantages of admission fees outweigh the disadvantages.

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galeries
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galleries
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of the country, some are
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chargeable
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we see about advantages and disadvantages
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foreigners
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come
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that museums and art
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galleries
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place for allover the country.
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intrested
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interested
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coming
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government
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art
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gallery
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something knowledge but they can not
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afford
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goverment
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government
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free entry
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hence
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government take tickets for
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maintenance
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fee
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will be
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the nominal and low
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everyone
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, Museum art
galeries
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galleries
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free and nominal fees which
everyone
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can
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afford
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, they take fees from them
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because maintenance
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overall
Start with a clear view and end with one clear line.
coherence
Make one idea per paragraph and use simple link words to show side A and side B.
language
Use easy words. Do not use long or hard word. Keep grammar simple.
task achievement
Give more exact facts or places to back points.
lexical
Check spell of key words like government, maintenance, free entry.
task achievement
Be clear about your view in the last line.
content
The essay tries to show both sides.
structure
The 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' give structure.
content
The idea of free entry is clear.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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