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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph compares the price of
bananas
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 in four different countries over a ten-year interval.
Overall
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, all trends experienced relative declines with some fluctuations.
While
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 the leading country in the
prices
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 for
bananas
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 was
Japan
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 throughout the period, the USA had the lowest
prices
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 and remained at the bottom. In the initial years, the cost for the
bananas
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 rose significantly from approximately $2,00 to striking nearly $3,00 per kilogram, in comparison to the USA, which began with nearly $1,00 and slightly increased to over $1,00. The
costs
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 for
bananas
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 in
France
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 were relatively higher ($1,60) compared to
Germany
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, where the
costs
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 were about $1,40 per kilogram. These figures contrast starkly with the
costs
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 in 1996, when the cost of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 sharply fell to just under $2,00. Notably, the
costs
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 in
Germany
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 started to increase and reached $1,50 in the same year;
however
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, the price in
France
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 has not changed at all. In the continuing years, all countries showed variations in the
prices
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, until 2001, when the
prices
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 fell noticeably in
Japan
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 and reached about $2,40. At the same time, the
costs
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 rose considerably to $1,70 and $1,40 in both
France
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 and
Germany
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, respectively. By the end of the period, the
costs
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 in
Japan
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 rebounded $2,50,
although
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 the
prices
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 in
France
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 gradually decreased to $1,00, it
then
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 increased to nearly $1,50. Both
Germany
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 and the USA remained stable at about $1,30 and $1,20, respectively , by the end.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, prices, japan, costs, france, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • stability
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • significant
  • comparison
  • variation
  • consistently
  • peak
  • trough
  • average
  • period
  • respectively
  • domestic market
  • external factors
  • plummet
  • surge
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