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Band 2

Many people cannot speak or present well in public, an idea is to start the training from school. State if it is important to speak well in public. Do you agree or disagree

Majority
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 of people have issues with public speaking or presentation, there is an idea to commence the training from school. And I totally agree that it is crucial to know how to talk with the public. Many people have
problem
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problems
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 with their presentation in public or speaking with them, so
that
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apply
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those individuals
promoting
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are promoting
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 the idea of teaching how to act in front of a lot of people among the youngsters. Promoters find
appropriate
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the idea of including the speaking courses into the part of the studies
.
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appropriate.
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 If visitors practice how to talk, to have a debate with each other and learn how to make the public listen to them, they
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 would have a good career, since
to be
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being
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 a good manager means
to know
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knowing
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 how to communicate or how to be a leader.
To conclude
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, I definitely agree
if
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that if
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 the schools start to include the courses where the children from
the
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apply
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day one
,
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 could practice
public-speaking
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public speaking
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, and
to
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know how to behave. It would
be
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have
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 a good impact
in
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on
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 their future
make ups
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makeups
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 in
career
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the career
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 ladder.

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language
Fix many grammar and word use errors. Use short, simple sentences.
structure
Put each idea in one paragraph. Start with the main idea, give a reason, and end with a link to the next idea.
structure
Add a short intro that says the big idea and a short conclusion that restates it.
content
Avoid repeating ideas. Use clear, exact words.
content
The writer has a clear view and agrees with the idea.
content
The topic is useful and the plan to train from school is easy to see.
structure
The essay has a simple plan and is easy to follow.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • articulate
  • confidence
  • eloquence
  • communication skills
  • performing in public
  • express ideas clearly
  • reduce anxiety
  • effective speaker
  • audience engagement
  • leadership skills
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