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The bar chart below shows the percentage of government spending on roads and transport in 4 countries in the years 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of government spending on roads and transport in 4 countries in the years 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005.
The bar chart illustrates how much the governments in 4 different countries spent on roads and transport in the years 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005.
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, it is apparent that Portugal has the highest governmental spending on road and
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 the UK possesses the lowest statistics among the 4 countries. Specifically, Portugal’s government allocated more than a quarter of the total spending on transportation in 1990, which was about 5%
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percent
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 higher than the second-highest spender - Italy, with 22
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.
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 the UK and the USA’s expenditures were significantly lower at 10 and 11
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 respectively, which were 2.5 times lower than that of Portugal. Regarding the changes over the years, the figures of Portugal declined
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 over the 15-year period to exactly 20
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 in 2005. In comparison, the corresponding figures from Italy and the UK
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 displayed a general downward trend throughout the studied period
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 the exception of a short increase in 2000.
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, the expenditure figures of the USA demonstrated an upward trend , rising to 15
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 in 2005, despite dropping a minimal 1% in 1995.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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