The bar shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of cinema attendance in a European country on each day of the week in 2003, 2005, and 2007.
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, weekends attracted far more cinema-goers than weekdays, with Saturday clearly dominating. Friday was the only day that remained unchanged across years
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several weekdays experienced notable fluctuations. Saturday consistently recorded the highest figures, rising from about 40% in 2003 to 45% in 2005, before slightly lower to 43% in 2007. Sunday
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attracted a relatively large audience, at around one-third of the population.
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, weekday attendances were far lower.
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, Monday ranged between 10% and 14%, and Wednesday fell dramatically from 17% in 2003 to 7% in 2007, the lowest point. The proportion of audiences on Friday still remained unchanged at 30% across three years. Meanwhile, it witnessed some minor fluctuations around 7% to 20% on Tuesday and Thursday

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task
Task response: add a clear overall view and a short ending. Try to state what the chart shows in one line at the start and finish with a short conclusion.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: link ideas with simple join words to show change over time, use a new paragraph for the overview and for detail sentences.
style
General check: keep to simple words from the top 100 list, keep numbers close to the chart, and use the same words for days.
content
Clear idea that weekends have higher numbers than weekdays.
organization
Good structure with intro, overview, and details.
data
Use of numbers for key days (Saturday and Sunday).

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