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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional and their personal lives. Do you think the advantage of taking risks are outweight the disadvantages?

It is important for people to take the chance, either in their working lives
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 or their private lives.
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outweigh the disadvantages
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 to to do a risk for what you want to achieve .
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, taking risks can lead to personal growth and professional success,
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 helps to step out of your comfort zone.
In addition
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, it
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helps
 to learn new skills, a better understanding of yourself with an increased
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confidence
.
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for
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 example, trying a new hobby or
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solo
traveling
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 when you that by
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 you would feel proud and happy from
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furthermore
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, it opens up new opportunities, whether it is moving to another place or city for
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a job
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 that
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leads
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 to exciting moments in your life.
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, despite all the
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benefits,
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 there are some disadvantages as well, like
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potential
 for failure. The most obvious drawback is the possibility of negative outcomes. and
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, stress and anxiety, which the
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uncertainty
 that comes with taking risks can be out of control.
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, it often means giving up a secure and stable situation
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 it could have some impact on others because the consequences of risks aren't always limited
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 decision
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can
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 affect your family, friends or
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colleagues,
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 if
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the result is negative.
To sum up
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,
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taking
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risks
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 could be
benefitful
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beneficial
 and
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a big
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 chance to turn
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your dreams and plans
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into
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 reality
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 it could
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 in
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contrast
of
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planning
Plan before you write. Make a short plan with intro, 3 ideas in the body, and a short ending.
idea
You show a real idea that taking risks can help you grow.
content
You give some examples like trying a new hobby or moving for study.
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