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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
provides
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provide
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 key information about cases why
people
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 go to her office using a
car
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 or
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bysicle
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by bicycle
 
Overall
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,
It
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it
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 is clear from the graph that
individual
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individuals
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 prefer
go
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to go
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 to business by
the
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apply
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car
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 .
In addition
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,one of the reasons
that
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 when we go by
the
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car
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 it's more comfortable,
whereas
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 by
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bysicle
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bicycle
 it is healthier but harder than going by
the
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car
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 .
Firstly
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,
according to
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 what is shown,the most common reason why
people
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 like to go by
bysicle
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 is faster than cars. Sometimes we get up
late
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late,
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 so we want something fast and easy
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. Moreover
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moreover
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, nowadays
government
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the government
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 is stressing, focusing and giving instructions to maintain a clean environment and fresh air.
Finally
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,
In
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in
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term
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terms
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 of
second
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the second
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 part of
chart
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the chart
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 is driving to work by motorcar
,
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apply
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It
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apply
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is safer than
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bysicle
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by bicycle
. It is
also
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 clear that the majority of
people
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 prefer to go to work by
car
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 because it is more comfortable than by bicycle
and
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, and
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people
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 are looking for comfort at
this
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 time.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car, bysicle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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