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Many people think that living in the city is better than living in the countryside. To what extent do you agree with this view? ( TL )

In today`s fast-paced world, everyone
think
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thinks
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 that living in the city is more beneficial than staying in
the
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small villages. In my opinion,
cities
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 may provide more opportunities for
people
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 who are highly qualified,
while
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 living in
countryside
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the countryside
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 can give better
health
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 and more
option
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options
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 for farming.
To begin
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 with, living in large
cities
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 may create many chances for an individual.
Due to
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this
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, many
cities
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 have their industrial zones
,
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 whoever holds
higher
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a higher
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 degree or skill, they may get
highly
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a highly
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 paid job in
reputed
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a reputable
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 company around the city.
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,
this
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area
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have
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has
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higher
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a higher
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poppulation
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population
, so everyone
get
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gets
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 enough chances to build their business and start-up.
People
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 can get good facilities from the council, so
lifestyle
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their lifestyle
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 can reach
higher
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a higher
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 level.
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, there was
a
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apply
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research done by Western Sydney University which says
cities
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 may
give
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provide
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good
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a good
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 working environment for
public
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the public
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 and improve their affordability with higher income.
Lastly
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, staying
at
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in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 may end up with lower
icome
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income
 and good
health
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.
As a result
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,
habitat
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habitats
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 which is located in remote
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area
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areas
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 may have fewer or
less
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fewer
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 option good education, so
people
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selecting
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select
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 to migrate towards highly populated areas, where
good
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a good
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 scope
available
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apply
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of development.
Furthermore
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,
cities
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 have more
poppulation
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population
 and pollution
so
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, so
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people
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 may
faces
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face
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health
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 problems
,
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;
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however
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,
samll
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small
 town has fresh air and natural food, because of the more green
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area
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areas
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 and farms,
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this
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which
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 can
give
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provide
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 fresh oxygen for
breath
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breathing
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.
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, there was an article in the Times of India which mentioned
people
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 living in small villages may have longer lifespan, and better
health
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,
while
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 they are facing issues with earning.
For
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In
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 conclusion,
people
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 living in
the
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apply
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higher
poppulation
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population
have
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areas have
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good
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a good
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 lifestyle and more options for earning,
while
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 in remote
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area
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areas
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 they get good
health
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 and organic food
which
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, which
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make
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makes
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body
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their bodies
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 more fit.

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task response
Be clear about your view. State a strong position at the end of the intro and keep it through the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words to show order, like First, Next, Also, In conclusion. Start each paragraph with a clear topic line.
task response
You give both sides of the issue, which is good for the task.
coherence and cohesion
You give some examples to support your points.
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