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The graph shows the income of four cafes in New York over last year.

The graph shows the income of four cafes in New York over last year.
The line graph illustrates the
income
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 of four
cafetaria
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cafeterias
of
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in
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 New York from
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the privious
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privious
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previous
year
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.
Overall
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, the tea room
cafe
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 had the highest
income
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 for the
year
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,
Punctuation problem
;
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however
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, the lowest
sell
Verb problem
sales were
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 done by
cafe
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 cool in
past
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the past
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year
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.
In addition
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,
other
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apply
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both
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cafe
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cafes
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 had
medium
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a medium
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income
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, where
wi-fi
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the wi-fi
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cafe
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 had reached
top
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the top
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sell
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sales
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in
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at
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end
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the end
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 of the
years
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year
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,
while
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 the
income
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 of
the
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apply
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the tea room went lowest in the
last
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month
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.
Firstly
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, the tea room had the
higest
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highest
sell
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sales of
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 160
in
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at
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start
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the start
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 of the period,
then
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cafe
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the cafe
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 had
fluctuating
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a fluctuating
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 trend and stayed on top till
october
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October
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apply
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month
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, and reached
bottom
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its lowest
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sale
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sales
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around
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of around
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 50 in
the
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apply
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december
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December
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apply
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month
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.
Moreover
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,
internet express
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Internet Express
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 had the
second highest
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second-highest
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sell
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sales
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 in
january
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January
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 at 100 and
goes below
Verb problem
fell
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 to 80 in
april
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April
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 and stayed constant for
following
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the following
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 four
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month
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months
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, and reached
at
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apply
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second place at 140.
Lastly
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,
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cafe cool
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Cafe Cool
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 had the lowest
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sale
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sales
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 throughout the
year
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untill
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until
november
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November
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 and
then
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 went up to 120
in
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at
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 the end of the
year
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.
Furthermore
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,
wi-fi
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the wi-fi
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cafe
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 had the second lowest
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sale
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sales
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 in the
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year
Punctuation problem
year,
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start
Wrong verb form
starting
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 with nearly 50 and
finished
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finishing
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 with the highest
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sale
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sales
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in
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at
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 the end of the period at
ar4ound
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around
 190.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, year, cafe, month, sale with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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