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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon.

In today’s world, an increasing number of imported
products
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,
such
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 as cars, food supplies, and many other items, are entering different
countries
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.
This
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 trend has both advantages and disadvantages, which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with,
products
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 made abroad have many benefits for
countries
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.
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 is because they are usually cheaper than those produced by local industries.
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, the lower price allows people from low-income backgrounds to buy the
goods
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 they need at an affordable cost.
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, many nations prefer to import different types of
goods
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 from other
countries
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.
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, importing
products
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 can negatively affect the local industries’ income.
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 may lead to a significant loss of revenue, harming the domestic economy, because citizens rely more on imported
products
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 rather than local ones.
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, some
countries
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 impose high taxes on foreign
goods
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 to protect their industries and encourage people to buy locally. In
this
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 way, the national economy has a chance to grow stronger. In conclusion,
although
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 importing
goods
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 provides cheaper
products
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 for people, it can harm local industries and reduce economic independence.
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, governments should balance between importing
goods
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 and supporting domestic production.

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structure
Make a clear link from each idea to an example.
examples
Give more real examples to back each point.
language
Keep words simple and fix small grammar mistakes.
conclusion
End with a strong closing that restates the main point.
content
The essay shows both sides of the issue.
structure
The conclusion gives a sense of balance.
language
Language is mostly clear and easy to follow.

Your opinion

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