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Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. Discuss, what is your opinion?

A good
citizen
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 is a blessing to society. Some people opine that paying
taxes
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 is enough contribution towards
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society
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society,
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whereas
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 others believe that a good
citizen
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 has a lot more responsibilities than just paying
taxes
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. I personally go with the latter view. In the
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 I intend to enumerate the responsibilities of a good
citizen
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. It is irrefutable that paying all the
taxes
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and
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in a timely manner is one of the major responsibilities of a
citizen
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. It is necessary to pay
taxes
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 because the money
that is
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 paid by
citizens
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 is used for constructive purposes, like building and maintaining roads, schools, fire protection, defence services
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. The different types of
taxes
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 to be paid by
citizens
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 are income
tax
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, excise
tax
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, property
tax
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, sales
tax
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etc
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. Most people try to avoid
taxes
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, but to have the freedoms that we have, we must fund our
government
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 agencies. All
taxes
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 exist to make our lives better. To enjoy our comparatively
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 lives, we must pay
taxes
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.
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, there are many other obligations which a good
citizen
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 must fulfil.
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 with, voting in elections is very important. When
citizens
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 fail to vote or have political opinions,they allow vested interests to have their way.
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, they must obey law and order. If all
citizens
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 are
law abiding
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,
then
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 the whole nation would be a paradise on Earth. It is
also
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 the responsibility of a good
citizen
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 to provide public service to the
government
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.
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 means volunteering for various agencies and charities.
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, it is a
citizen
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's duty to
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 the
government
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's actions and take
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stands
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 when something wrong happens. When
citizens
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 get too complacent, they will not notice when their freedom is being cut down. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that
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 a good
citizen
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 should pay
taxes
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, exercise his voting rights, be
law abiding
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law-abiding
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, do voluntary work to help the
government
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 and take a stand if anything goes wrong. Blythe Danner has rightly said, “We all have an obligation as
citizens
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 of
this
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 earth to leave the world a healthier, cleaner, and better place for our children and future generations.”

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task
In the intro, clearly state your view and give a plan of the essay.
content
Add more details or small examples to back each point.
coherence
Use shorter sentences and simple links to join ideas.
grammar
Check grammar and fix small errors in punctuation.
tone
Avoid unused quotes; fit the quote to your own closing idea.
content
Clear view is shown and kept through the essay.
structure
There is a good plan of ideas and order.
coherence
The essay uses linking words well.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental
  • development
  • public services
  • social contract
  • financially support
  • civic responsibility
  • communal activities
  • engaged in the political process
  • advocating
  • enriches
  • actively participate
  • political process
  • less fortunate
  • environmentally responsible
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