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Writing Samples
Band 5

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houselflat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter explain the reasons for the noise apologise describe what action you will take

Dear Ms. Jocel I am writing
this
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 letter to
apologize
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apologise
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about
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for
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 the
noise
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 that has been coming from my house lately.
Recently
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Recently,
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 you already mentioned
about
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the
noise
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 in my house. I am really grateful that you sent
this
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 letter. I have 3 bulldogs that are very sensitive to strangers
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. If
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 someone passes by my
house
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house,
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 they will bark at them. And it was because they were not trained properly.
Suddenly
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 there was someone who tried to disturb the dogs,
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that
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which
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 is why they were making a loud
noise
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. But right
now
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now,
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 the situation is under control after I sent them to the training
center
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centre
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. I trained them with professional coaches
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 if there are strangers passing by or disturbing them, they will not be reactive and remain calm. So after what happened lately, I promise you they will not make a
noise
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 again. Hope you will accept my apology
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 I am really sorry for the
incovinience
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inconvenience
 Yours sincerely, Miki

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Task response
Try to keep one idea in each paragraph. Start with a short apology, then give the reason, then say what you will do. This makes your letter easy to read.
Coherence and cohesion
Use clear and simple links between ideas. Put all on separate lines for each part: apology, reason, action, closing. This helps the reader follow the plan.
Task response
The letter has a clear apology and a plan to fix the issue.
Coherence and cohesion
The tone is polite and respectful overall.
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