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Some people believe that animal testing should be completely banned, while others argue that it is necessary for scientific and medical progress. Write an essay discussing both views and giving your opinion.

In recent years, with the development of technology, scientific experiments have increased rapidly worldwide.
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this
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 raises ethical
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due to
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 animal testing.
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, the topic of animal testing has led to widespread discussions.
People
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 are mainly divided into groups, one of which supports the view that animal testing is logical, as it provides significant medical advancements.
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 the other opposes it. I believe that the former is more logical, since minor health issues may prevent major health issues. It has been argued that animal testing should be banned because
people
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 can protect
animals
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 from cruelty.
Animals
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 are alive like humans.
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, it should be pointed out that scientists gain significant knowledge, thanks to
animals
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.
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, they can inflict damage upon animal lives.
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, they can save a significant number of lives.
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, the advantages of animal testing outweigh its disadvantages. It could be asserted that it should be banned because of alternative methods. Some
people
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 contend that scientists can prefer test subjects who are not alive.
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, they may have a point. Lack of alternatives leads to using
animals
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 as
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test
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. They cannot use humans because of
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 regulations, which in turn encourage other options. In conclusion, there are
people
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 who consider that scientists cannot harm
animals
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.
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, some
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 claim that professionals would rather choose
animals
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 based on a risk-benefit balance. It is my contention that professionals can use
animals
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;
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 be cautious.

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task
Make your introduction clearly state your view and how you will argue. Put the thesis at the end of the introduction.
coherence
Use simple links to show how ideas connect and keep ideas in order.
structure
Give one main idea in each paragraph and explain it with a small, real example.
language
Check for spelling, grammar and word choice. Use simple, short sentences.
task
Your stance is clear in the essay.
coherence
There is a plan with an overall idea.
coherence
You end with a conclusion that states your view.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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