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Some people like to try new things, for example places to visit and types of food. other people prefer to keep doing things they are familier with. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are
diffrent
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different
 types of
people
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 around the world
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. Some
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people
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 prefer experiencing
thing
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things
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 they are
familer
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familiar
 with or
people
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 who like to try new
things
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like
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, like
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 tourist hot spots
trending
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and trending
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 restaurants.
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 essay will discuss both characters with suitable examples. In general, individuals who love to try new
things
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 are like
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 because they have a wider view
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of
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 life
more
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apply
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than other
people
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who
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, who
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 are too scared to do
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 because perhaps
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they
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afraid
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are afraid
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 of being rejected or pushed away.
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, they stay
inclosed
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enclosed
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 in
there
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their
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 world and
not
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do not
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 learning about new
culture
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cultures
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,
trying
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try
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 new foods, see extraordinary views of luscious mountains and
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forests
.
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result
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result,
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 they gain better views of the world and
understanding
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understand
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people
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 better.
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, some
poeple
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people
 like to enjoy
things
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 they are accustomed to
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, like
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 sitting in the comfort of
there
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their
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 homes
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, rotting
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 away with the same
poeple
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people
 they met 10 years ago, and
also
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 not putting in the effort to do
things
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, these
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. These
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people
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also
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dont
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don't
 like taking risks
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;
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 they like playing it safe and not branching out into other
things
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. One way to solve
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 is
balancing
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by balancing
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 between those two, taking small steps for the greater good.
This
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 leads to better life choices and enjoyment
at the end
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. Ultimately, the choice is
to
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up to
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 the person
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. Some
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 will take
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 advice and ignore it
you
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; you
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 can't force
people
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 into new
thing
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things
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maybe
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. Maybe
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it
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it's
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 for the better
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. This
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this
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lifs
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life
 is not for
everone
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everyone
.
is
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 there any spelling mistake

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coherence
Make the main idea clear in every paragraph and show how it links to the task.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas fit, like 'but', 'however', 'also', 'for example'.
language
Check spelling and grammar, especially common words: 'different', 'familiar', 'forests' etc.
task
Give a clear opinion at the end and keep it short and strong.
content
The essay writes about both sides and gives a final view.
structure
Some simple ideas are used and let the reader see the plan.
language
There are some good examples about visiting places and trying foods.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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