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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.
The bar chart provides information about global
population
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 percentages and the distribution of
wealth
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 by region. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that North
America
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, Europe, and Rich Asia-Pacific account for the highest proportions of global
wealth
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,
while
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 they show the lowest proportions of
population
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.
In contrast
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, other regions display the opposite pattern.
According to
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 the chart, North
America
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 represents the peak of global
wealth
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 at nearly 35%, despite containing just above 5% of the
population
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. Europe has a similar percentage of global
wealth
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 to North
America
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, at approximately 30%, but its share of the
population
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 is about 10% higher. China has an immense proportion of
population
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 compared to all nations, at over 20%, yet it contributes just under 5% of global
wealth
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. Other Asia-Pacific and India show equivalent proportions of
population
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, but there is a slight difference in global
wealth
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 between them. Africa, Latin
America
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, and the Caribbean all record low rates in both
population
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 and
wealth
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.
This
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 highlights that the proportion of
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population
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the population
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 does not necessarily determine global
wealth
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 distribution.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, wealth, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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