The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram outlines the process of the lifecycle of large
fishes
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called
salmons
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which
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, which
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occur in 3 phases
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they
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are categorized
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categorized
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by their ages when
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frys
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fry
, smolts and adults.
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, it is vividly evident that the cycle begins prior to eggs becoming
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fry
when salmon eggs are side
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the small stones and the reeds
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around 10 years
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when the
salmons
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salmon
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start breeding. The process after fertility starts with their eggs at the upper rivers moving slowly
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this
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period takes approximately 5 to 6 months until these species become
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fry
their
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size being 3 to 8 cm.
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, they tend to go into the
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depths
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of rivers and the pace of their movement significantly increases
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this
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period takes around 4 years till smolts are recognised, and
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size
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them
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becomes between 12 and 15 cm.
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, smolts commute to open seas to live there for over 5 years before becoming adults
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is worth noting that their size rocketed to 70 to 75 cm
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they return to the surface of the rivers again.

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