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These days,many university courses are offered through the internet,some people think that the online teaching has more advantage than conventional classroom teaching or lectures while others claimed there are significant disadvantages Do the benefits of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages?

It is undeniable that university
curriculum
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 are advanced and
students
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 can have these courses online. Some hold opinions that
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digital
 teaching is more beneficial than traditional classroom teaching,
while
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 others reckon that it has obvious
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. Personally, I think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages.
To begin
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 with, the negative sides of the online
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teaching
 can apparently
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on
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students
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 who
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 not focus on the class. Taking notes is a good example, if a student
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 not even write words in the conventional classroom, we cannot expect them to write something down in their notebook in front of the screen
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 the laziness and lack of self-discipline.
In addition
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, when they are having online lessons, some of them
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 not open the cameras to prevent professors
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from seeing
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 them in order to do something that
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 to study
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 worse, if the teachers put assignments or quizzes online,
students
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 are easy to get involved in plagiarism through artificial intelligence with
screen shots
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.
On the other hand
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, online teaching is a
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 it
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 have some practical and appropriate innovations that
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 better than the traditional way.
For instance
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,
students
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 in front of the screen can listen to
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the teacher's
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 voice loud and clear
which
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 eliminates the problem of
students
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 who
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 in the back row cannot hear the sound
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swich
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Switching
 the microphones on
thier comupter
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their computer
 can
also
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 help them avoid the sound made by themselves accidentally.
Moreover
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, with the assistance of electronic devices,
students
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 can paste and copy the teachers'
classnotes
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class notes
 on their computer or laptop, which
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the
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time by handwriting
it
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them
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. Another worth-mention thing is that online courses can save time for
students
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traveling
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 through the academic buildings and
also
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 can let them review the courses online, especially before the pivotal exam or presentation, the information
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the
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past lessons
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 really helpful. In conclusion,
although
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 online teaching
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 have negative effects on a specific group of
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,
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its benefits outweigh its drawbacks
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 not only for
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 but
also
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can let
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 them improve the skill of using
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 computer
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structure
Plan your essay with three clear parts: intro, body, and conclusion. State your view in the intro, then add one main idea in each body part, and finish by restating your view.
grammar
Use simple, correct grammar. Check verb tense and plural form. For example: 'online teaching is' not 'online teaching are'.
content
Give a clear example for each idea and explain how it supports your point.
cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however', to show how ideas fit.
lexical
Keep to easy words. Avoid hard and long words that are not in the top 100.
style
Use short sentences. Avoid long, run-on lines so readers can follow your point.
content
You show a view and a balance by talking about both sides.
content
You use examples from online tools to show points.
structure
There is a clear end line that states your view.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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