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Band 5.5

Thr table below compares the use of water by four different countries.

Thr table below compares the use of water by four different countries.
The table gives information about
Correct article usage
the utilization
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utilization
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utilisation
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 of water in four countries
namely
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, namely
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 Egypt, Saudi Arabia, New Zealand ,
Canada
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and Canada
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. 
Overal
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Overall
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,
while
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 in Egypt and Saudi Arabia
biggest
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the biggest
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figure
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sector
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 is
agriculture
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 , but in New Zealand and Canada the biggest
index
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sector
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 is
industry
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. As
table
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the table
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 shows
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,
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in Egypt largest
figure
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 is
agriculture
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 at 82 , but the smallest
figure
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 is domestic use at 8
and
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, and
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industry
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’s
figure
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 is 10 . In Saudi
Arabia
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Arabia,
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 the biggest
figure
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 is
agriculture
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 at 64 ,but
dimestic
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domestic
 use at 6 and
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industry
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the industry
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figure
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 is at 30. In New
Zealand
Punctuation problem
Zealand,
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 the largest
figure
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 is
industry
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 at 46
,
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;
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Linking Words
however
Punctuation problem
however,
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 the smallest
figure
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 is domestic at 10, and
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agriculture
Correct article usage
the agriculture
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figure
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 is at 44. In
Canada
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Canada,
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 the biggest
figure
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 is
industry
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 at 70 ,but the smallest
figure
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 is
agriculture
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is
Verb problem
apply
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at 10
and
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, and
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domestic
Correct article usage
the domestic
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 use
figure
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 is at 20.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, agriculture, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 12 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 12 times.
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