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Band 5.5

The map below shows a traditiomal anf modern two-storey Japanese house.

The map below shows a traditiomal anf modern two-storey Japanese house.
The map gives information about
national
Correct article usage
a national
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 and up-to-date two-storey Japanese house.
Overall
Linking Words
, before, in
Japenese
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Japanese
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 houses there were 3 rooms ,but
know
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now
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 there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 3 bedrooms and one traditional
rooms
Fix the agreement mistake
room
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. As the map shows , in
Traditional
Correct article usage
a Traditional
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 Japanese house in
above
Correct article usage
the above
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corner
Punctuation problem
corner,
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 there was
cupboard
Correct article usage
a cupboard
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but
Punctuation problem
, but
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modern
Change preposition
in modern
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japanees
Correct your spelling
Japanese
 houses
it
Punctuation problem
, it
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 wasn’t changed. Before there was
room
Use synonyms
 one
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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know
Use the right word
now
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 it is living
dining
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living-dining
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.
Stairs
Correct article usage
The stairs
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 place didn’t change
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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Entrance
Correct article usage
the Entrance
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 place didn’t change. Before there was
Correct article usage
a
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kitchen,but
know
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now
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this
Linking Words
 is
traditional
Correct article usage
a traditional
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room
Use synonyms
.
Before
Punctuation problem
Before,
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 there were
Use synonyms
room
Fix the agreement mistake
rooms
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 two and
Use synonyms
room
Check wording
apply
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three
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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know
Use the right word
now
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,
this
Linking Words
 is bedroom two and bedroom three.In
traditional
Correct article usage
a traditional
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japanese
Fix capitalization
Japanese
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house
Punctuation problem
house,
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 there was cup
board
Use the right word
cupboard
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 in belove corner but
know
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now
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 it is
bedroom
Correct article usage
a bedroom
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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