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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are many people in the world who think that some specific jobs
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such
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, such
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 as
doctor
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a doctor
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 and
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an engineer
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engineer
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engineer,
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 should exist in the
country
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 where they
study
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studied
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.
On the other hand
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, think they have the right to
work
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 freely.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and illustrate my perspective on the potential advantage of working in the
country
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 where they
did
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received their
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 training.
To begin
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 with, there are many young individuals who prefer to study and
work
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 abroad.
Firstly
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, to study or
work
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 outside
motherhome
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the motherhome
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it
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apply
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is more open to their career path.
Secondly
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, the homeland's financial status is one of the most important reasons they move out
from
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of
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 their
country
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, especially
with
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in
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 developing or underdeveloped
countries
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 .
Furthermore
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, working in different
countries
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also
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gets
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results in
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 different welfare and salary rates.
For example
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, Thai petrol engineers prefer to
work
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 abroad because of career growth and pay rates
are
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that are
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 better than working in Thailand.
Conversely
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, there are considerable notions for professional graduates to stay in their home
country
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due to
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 various factors. Primarily, they are familiar with local culture and domestic regulations,
it
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which
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 provides an opportunity for the staff to facilitate both professional integration and personal comfort.
This
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 will affect their home nation economically
due
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because
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the
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apply
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they can exercise their Human Resources efficiency in their own economic environment.
Additionally
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,
occupational
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an occupational
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 license is restricted to the
country
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 where they did
training
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their training
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due to
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 the medical regulations and protocols in each
country
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 varied in each
country
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. To illustrate, medical staff from Japan could not
work
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 in different
countries
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 because their medical school provide
differ
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a different
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 structure from other
countries
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. If they want to
work
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 in a different
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country
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country,
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 they require a license in each specific
county
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country
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.
To sum up
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, I strongly believe professional workers should
work
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 in their own training
country
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.
This
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 will benefit
work
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 for both
individual
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the individual
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 and
nation
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the nation
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 in terms of personal development and
refrain
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prevent
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 brain draining.

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task
Plan your essay. Say both views first, then give your own clear answer.
task
Add one clear example for each view to back up your point.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas are linked.
language
Check spelling and grammar to avoid small mistakes.
content
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
content
The writer states a clear personal view at the end.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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