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Band 2.5

Some people think it is more impỏtant to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Transportation
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The transportation
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system
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 is one of the most important systems in the country
, daily
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. Daily
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 maintenance and
system
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 management
is
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are
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 very important
due to
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number
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the number
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 of passengers using it daily
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such
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, such
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 as students
working
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, working
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 people and tourists
, in
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. In
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 my
opinion
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opinion,
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 both roads, motorways and
public
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the public
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transportation
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system
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 should be
spend
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given
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money
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priority
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on
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apply
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and take care of weekly or even daily. First of all, in my opinion roads and motorways
system
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are
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is
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 very important to spend money on and have a very high level of quality and technology to avoid accidents and
traffics
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traffic
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which
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, which
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 result in delays in travel and work conditions problems
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, specially
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specially
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especially
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 during the morning or if
emergency
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an emergency
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 happens.
Furthermore
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,
public
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the public
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transportation
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system
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 should
also
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taken
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be taken
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 care of because
its
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it's
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 the most common way to travel and transport
with in
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within
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the
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apply
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cities and countries
, students
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. Students
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 in
the
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apply
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schools
uses
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use
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 buses and railways to go to school,
also
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 people going to work
moat
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most
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 of them
are
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apply
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usually use public
transportation
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 to reach their destination.
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, spending money on both systems
are
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is
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 reflected in a good way to the country because statistics
shows
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show
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 that
good
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a good
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 quality
transportation
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system
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 reflects on economic development and higher revenue outcomes
due to
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 more people seeking to have
clean
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clean,
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save
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safe
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good
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, good
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 quality
trips
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trips,
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 whether
its
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it's
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 from taxis, buses and trains or roads and services.

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task
State your view clearly at the start and keep it till the end. Give 2 or 3 strong reasons with small facts or examples.
coherence
Divide the essay into clear blocks. Each block has one idea. Begin with an intro that says your view and a short plan, and finish with a short conclusion.
structure
The writer shows a plan to talk about both roads and public transport.
coherence
Uses ordering words like First of all, Furthermore, Finally.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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