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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years
The pie chart illustrates what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their studying course. The table gives information about the salaries of
the
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workers
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work
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 in
this
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 occupation after five years.
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, the full-time
work
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 of the destination of Anthropology graduates was the largest segment . In comparison, the part-time
work
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+postgrad
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postgrad
 study made up the least contribution in the pie . The government sector has
give
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 50%
from
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of
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his
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 employees $100,000
and
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or
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 more. The freelance consultant salaries are 80% take $75,000 to
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$100,000. The private companies
is
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 not have a nice budget because it is not
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a common
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 type of employment, and the percentage of salaries under $75,000 is 45% ,
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that is
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meaning
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 about
the
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apply
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half of employees take a low salary. Only 30%
from
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of
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 the private companies take $100,000 or above in
his
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their
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 job, and 25% take between $75,000 and $99,999 after 5 years
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work
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of work
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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